You are sound asleep peacefully dreaming
suddenly a stranger comes and takes you away screaming
You yell for help hoping someone will hear you
Nobody comes and your terrified he will kill you
You wonder “What’s happening Why I’m I here”
He takes you somewhere dark and quiet and his motives become clear
You are dropped on the floor and your clothes are ripped off
You keep screaming with fear and think this men probable eats from a trough
You try to fight back you hit, scratch, and bite.
But what you don’t know is that he is aroused by your fright
He has his way with you, then drops you in a whole
Burying you alive is his final goal.
How can a men hurt a 9 year old girl that has no mistake
How can a men hurt a 9 year old girl that sees the world so perfect
What did she do to disserve so much pain?
5 comments:
Wow, Crisol-- that was pretty intense!
I am really impressed! That was really good!! You have a rhyme scheme that flows together in such a way that makes the poem flow off of your tongue. The content of it really gets the point across too!
Great job!! If you do not right poetry you should take it up!
i think this is wonderful!!!! i agree with both a top.... i am soooo WOWED!!! by this... its just a vivid picture in my mind... knida scary huh... how a persons writing can effect someone sooooo much..... the last part was riveting to me it scared me and made me lock my door....
Excellente!!! great job....
I LIKE YOUR RHYMING-AND MY FAVORITE PART IS WHEN YOU SAY "HE TAKES YOU SOMEWHERE DARK AND QUIET AND HIS MOTIVES BECOME CLEAR.."
SCARY!
geeze! this became even more scary .. your topic creeps me out! but this was good! :P
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